优点英语读后续写：趣事类Part1：经典例文（姐弟重逢）1Part2：趣事类描写“两大核心技巧”3核心技巧1：矛盾塑造（尴尬+紧张）3核心技巧2：快乐结局塑造（感激+开心）4Part3：灵活应用4例1：成功的“复仇”4例2：做家务7Part4:高考真题再现9【真题1】2021年1月浙江卷：万圣节南瓜卡头9【真题2】2017年浙江卷：健忘而可爱的妈妈12Part1：经典例文（姐弟重逢）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Oneday,Ifoundawalletonthestreet.Thewalletcontainedonlythreedollarsandaveryoldletter.Theenvelopewaswornandtheonlythingonitwasthereturnaddress.Istartedtoopentheletter,hopingtofindsomeinformation.ThenIsawthedate-1990,andthesignature-Beatrice.Theletterwaswrittenseveraldecadesago.ThenImadeeveryeffortandfoundoutthatBeatricewasnowworkinginahospital.Ishowedhertheletter.Thesecondshesawtheletter,shetookadeepbreathandsaid,“Youngman,thisletterwasthelastcontactIeverhadwithHenry.Heismyonlybrother.Ilovedhimverymuch.Iwasonly16atthetimeandmybrotheristwoyearsyoungerthanme.Ifyoucanfindhim,tellhimI'mstilllookingforhim,”shesaidandtearsbegantowellupinhereyes.“Motheriswaitingforhimtocomebackhome.”,优点英语WhenIwalkedoutofthebuildingwiththewalletinmyhand,theguardofthebuildingrecognizedthewallet,andwithhishelp,Ifinallyfounditsowner,Henry.IhandedthewallettoHenryandhesaid,“Yes,that'smine!Itmusthavedroppedoutofmypocketthisafternoon.”“Ireadtheletterinthehopeoffindingoutwhoownedthewallet.”Isaid.Thesmileonhisfacesuddenlydisappeared.Heasked,“Youreadthatletter?”“NotonlydidIreadit,butalsoBeatriceread.”Ireplied.Hesuddenlybecameexcited.“Beatrice?Youknowwheresheis?Howisshe?Pleasetellme,”hebegged.“She'sfine.Shehasbeenlookingforyou.”Isaidsoftly.Hegrabbedmyhandandsaid,“Sir,youknowsheismyonlysisterinthisworld.I'vealwaysmissedher.”HenryandItooktheelevator(电梯)downtoBeatrice'sroom.Iwalkedovertoher.“Beatrice,”Isaidsoftly,pointingtoHenry,whowaswaitingwithmeinthedoorway.“Doyouknowtheman?”注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Beatriceadjustedherglasses,lookedforamoment,butdidn'tsayaword．______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________AboutthreeweekslaterIgotacallatmyofficefromBeatrice．_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Paragraph1：Beatriceadjustedherglasses,lookedforamoment,butdidn'tsayaword．Henrysaidsoftly,almostinawhisper,“Beatrice,it’sHenry.Doyourememberme?”Shesaidexcitedly,“Henry!Idon’tbelieveit!Henry!It'syou!MyHenry!”Hewalkedslowlytowardsherandtheyhugged.ThenurseandIleftwithtearsfallingdownourfaces.,优点英语比阿特丽斯调整了一下眼镜，看了一会儿，但一句话也没说。亨利轻声说，几乎是轻声说，“比阿特丽斯，是亨利。你还记得我了吗？她兴奋地说，“亨利！”我不相信！亨利！是你的名字！我的亨利先生！他慢慢地向她走去，他们拥抱在一起。护士和我离开了，眼泪流了下来。Paragraph2：AboutthreeweekslaterIgotacallatmyofficefromBeatrice．“CanyoubreakawayonSundaytoattendaparty?HenryandBeatricearegoingtohaveapartyinthehome!”Itwasabeautifulpartywithallthepeopledresseduptojoininthecelebration.Ifyoueverwantedtoseeawomanandamanactingliketwoteenagers,youhadtoseethiseldersisterandyoungerbrother.Itwasaperfectendingforafamilyaffectionthathadlastednearlyseveraldecades.大约三周后，我接到比阿特丽斯的电话。“你星期天可以参加聚会吗？”亨利和比阿特丽斯将在家里举办一个聚会！“这是一个美丽的派对，所有人都盛装参加庆祝活动。如果你想看到一个女人和一个男人像两个青少年，你必须看到这个姐姐和弟弟。这是一个持续了近几十年的家庭感情的完美结局。【解析】本文以信封为线索展开，讲述了作者在街上发现了一个钱包，在里面发现一封破旧的信，通过努力找到信主人的姐姐，通过保安大叔找到了钱包主人，最后，姐弟重逢的故事。1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“比阿特丽斯扶了扶眼镜，看了一会儿，但没有说一句话。”可知，第一段可描写姐弟两人重逢的温馨场景。②由第二段首句内容“大约三周后，我在办公室接到比阿特丽斯的电话。”可知，第二段可描写作者对重逢事件的感慨。2.续写线索：发现信封——找到信封主人姐姐——找到主人——姐弟重逢——感谢——感悟3.词汇激活行为类接电话：getacallat/putsbonto/pickupthetelephone/answerthephone抽出时间：breakawayon/taketimeoff/spareone’stime情绪类兴奋：didexcitedly/thrilled泪流满面：tearsbathe/streamdown/one’scheeks,优点英语【点睛】[高分句型1]：ThenurseandIleftwithtearsfallingdownourfaces.这句话运用了with的复合结构。[高分句型2]：Itwasaperfectendingforafamilyaffectionthathadlastednearlyseveraldecades这句话运用了that引导的定语从句。Part2：趣事类描写“两大核心技巧”核心技巧1：矛盾塑造（尴尬+紧张）1.Sonervouswashethat（他太紧张了）hedroppedtheelectriccarvingknife.（2021.04台州高三调考）2.Igotintoapanic（陷入惊慌之中）asIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.（2021年1月浙江高考）3.Sweatingandnearlytearing（汗流浃背，眼泪差点流下来）,IcouldimaginehowsillyandstrangeIwasatthatmomentbasedonthecontinuinglaughterfrommyparentsandJason.（2021年1月浙江高考）3.她立刻涨红了脸，感到尴尬几乎把她整个包围起来。Blushingscarletinstantly,shefeltembarrassmentalmostwreathedherentirely.核心技巧2：快乐结局塑造（感激+开心）1.他们耸了耸肩，咧着嘴笑，这就驱散了她的一切烦恼，给了她安慰。Theyshruggedandgrinned,whichdissipatedallherdistressandconsoledher.1.谢谢。她紧紧抓住打开的袋子，充满了感激和温暖。‘Thanks.’Clingingherhandstothebagopening,shewasoverwhelmedbyasurgeofgratitude,优点英语andwarmth.1.这两个强壮的陌生人点亮了她的一天。Thetwostrongstrangersundoubtedlylitherdayup.3.Wealljumpedtoourfeet,dancingandscreamingwithjoy（开心得欢呼雀跃）.（2021.04台州高三调考）4.ThoughIwasdissatisfiedwithmyuglygestureandstupidimage,IwassatisfiedwiththehappinessandfunthatIbroughttoothers（对我带给别人的快乐和乐趣感到满意）.（2021年1月浙江高考）5.她停了下来，心中洋溢着欢快的心情，拿出一把硬币，扭头把它们攥在他们的手里，尽管两个男人的表情都很惊讶。（2021嘉兴二模）Brimmingoverwithbrightfeelingandjoy,shestopped,fishedoutahandfulcoinsandtunedaroundtosqueezethemintheirfistsdespitetwomen'sastonishedexpression.Part3：灵活应用例1：成功的“复仇”阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。“Iwillhaverevenge(复仇)onhim,andmakehimregretwhathedidtome,”saidPhiliptohimself,hisfaceredwithanger.Stephen,whohappenedatthatmomenttowalkpastandhearhimtalkingtohimself.“Whoisthatyouwanttotakerevengeon?”askedStephen.Philiplookedathisfriendandsaid,“Youremembermynewballgivenbymyfather?Look!Itispunctured!ItwasfarmerRobinson’ssonwhodidthis!”,优点英语StephenaskedhimwhyyoungRobinsonhadruinedit.“Iwaswalkingandkickingmyball.”Philipreplied,“Byaccident,whenIwasoppositethegate,myballbumpedoverabucketofwaterleftinthepathwaybyhim.”“Hecameupandbegantoyellatme.IassuredhimthatwhatIhaddonewasanaccident,andthatIwasterriblysorryforit.Ialsoofferedtofetchanotherbucketofwaterforhim.ButdespiteallIhadsaid,hetookanailoutofhispocketandtwisteditintotheball,asyousee.Iwillmakehimpayforthis.”“Honestlyspeaking,”saidStephen,“heisalreadypunishedforwhathehasdone,becausenobodylikeshimandheoftenwalksaroundalone.Heisjustalonelyandmiserableboy.Thiswillbeenoughrevengeforyou.”“ButtheballismyfavoritegiftandIenjoyplayingwithitsomuch…”murmuredPhilip.“NowPhilip,”saidStephen,“Ithinkyoucanactbetterthanhimintermsofgettingrevenge.Iwilltellyouwhathappenedtohimnotlongago.”“Awhileagohesawabeehoveringaboutaflower.Hecaughtthebeeandwasgoingtopulloffitswingsforfun.Thebee,ofcourse,stunghim.Thepainmadehimsoangrythat,likeyou,hedecidedtogetrevenge.Hegotastick,andpresseditintothebeehive(蜂巢).”“Immediatelythewholeswarmofbeesflewoutandstunghimsobadlythathehadtospendafewdaysinbed.”“Soyousee,hewasnotverysuccessfulingettingrevenge.Whatifhecouldactbetterandforgivethebeeforstinginghim?”askedStephen.Paragraph1: “Imustsay,”repliedPhilip,“thatyouradviceseemsverygood”._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________,优点英语Paragraph2: Afewdaysafterward,PhilipsawthisyoungRobinsonfallashewascarryinghomeaheavylogofwood._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.答案： “Imustsay,”repliedPhilip,“thatyouradviceseemsverygood.Socomewithmeplease,andIwilltellmyfatherwhathappenedtotheball,andIthinkhewillnotbeangrywithme.”Theywent,andPhiliptoldhisfatherwhathadhappened.HethankedStephenforthegoodadvicehehadgivenhisson,andpromisedPhiliptogivehimanotherballexactlythesameasthefirst.“我得说，”菲利普回答说，“你的建议似乎很好。所以请跟我来，我要告诉我父亲舞会发生了什么事，我想他不会对我生气的。他们走了，菲利普把发生的事告诉了他父亲。他感谢斯蒂芬给他儿子的好建议，并答应菲利普再给他一个和第一个完全一样的舞会。Afewdaysafterwards,PhilipsawthisyoungRobinsonfallashewascarryinghomeaheavylogofwood.Itwastooheavyforhimtoliftupagain.Philiprantohim,andhelpedhimtoputitonhisshoulderagain.TheboywasembarrassedtobetreatedsokindlywhenhehadruinedPhilip’sballtheweekbefore!Hesaidthathewasverysorryforhisbehavior.Philipwenthomequitehappy.“This,”hesaid,“isthebestrevengeIcouldtake,inreturninggoodforbad.”几天后，菲利普看见这个年轻的罗宾逊带着一根沉重的木头回家时倒下了。它太重了，他不能再抬不起来了。菲利普跑到他跟前，帮他又把它放在肩上。这个男孩在一周前毁了菲利普的球，对这样友好感到很尴尬！他说他对自己的行为感到非常抱歉。菲利普很高兴地回家了。“这是，”他说，“这是我所能得到的最好的报复。”解析：,优点英语通过阅读所给文章可知,Philip因为农夫Robinson的儿子用钉子刺穿了自己新买的球而非常生气,扬言要报复他。Stephen劝他说没有人喜欢Robinson的儿子,他经常一个人走来走去。他只是一个孤独可怜的男孩。Stephen还告诉Philip,几天前Robinson的儿子被蜜蜂蛰了,就去打蜜蜂巢,结果被一大群蜜蜂蛰了,不得不在床上躺了几天的事情。续写部分分为两段,第一段开头是:“我得说,”Philip回答说,“你的建议似乎很好。”所以后文应该是讲述Philip放弃了报复的计划,告诉了父亲实情,Philip的父亲感谢Stephen给他儿子的忠告,答应Philip再给他买一个球,和第一个一模一样的。第二段开头是:几天后,Philip看到Robinson的儿子在把一根沉重的木头搬回家时摔倒了。本段应该写Philip帮助了Robinson的儿子,Robinson的儿子为自己几天前的行为道了歉,Philip高高兴兴地回了家,认为以德报怨就是最好的报复。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。【点睛】本文描写详略得当,使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如:beangrywith;goodadvice;thesameas;too…to…;embarrassed等高级词汇;Hesaidthathewasverysorryforhisbehavior.宾语从句等高级句式。例2：做家务阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。（满分25分）Duringlunchtime，Emmasuggestedgoingtothezootofeedtheanimalsandhermomagreed.“We’llstopbythebakeryandpicksomebreadup.Nowhurryandeatandthenwe’llgo.It’sgoingtobealovelyday.Grandmaiscomingwithus.She’llbehereanyminute，”momsaid.Emmaateherlunchandthenranintoherroomtogethershoes.Theproblemwasthatshecouldonlyfindoneofthem.Shelookedunderherbed,butallshecouldseeweredirtytowelsandpants.Shemovedsomeofhertoysoutoftheway，butstillcouldn’tfindhershoe.Aftershe’dcheckedeverywhereinherroom，sheranintothekitchen.“Mom，Ican’tfindmyshoe.WillyouwaitwhileIlookforit？”sheasked.Hermomthoughtabouthowmanytimesshe’dtoldEmmatocleanherroomup.She,优点英语whisperedsomethingtoEmma’sgrandmaandthensaidtoEmma，“Youwillhavetostayhome.YourdadandIwilltakeRyantothezoo.Grandmawillstayherewithyou.”“No！Pleasewaitforme.Iwanttogotothezoo，”Emmacried.“I’msorry,Emma.I’vetoldyouadozentimestocleanyourroomandyouignoredme.Youcan’tfindyourshoenow.It’syourownfaultfornotdoingasIasked.Youwillstayhome.”Emmaranintoherbedroom,crying.Hermomcametothedoorandsaid，“Emma，cleanthatroomofyoursbeforeIgethome.I’vetoldgrandmanottogiveyouanysweetsuntilyoufinishthework.”ShewentouttothecarwithRyanandEmma’sdadandthentheydroveaway.注意：1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2．应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1：Emmasatonherbedandcriedforalongtime.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Emmaandhergrandmaweresittingatthetable，eatingwhenhermom，dad，andRyancamehome.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Emmasatonherbedandcriedforalongtime.Andthenshewipedhereyesandstartedtocleanherroom.Ittookhertwohourstocleanuptheroom.“Ididit！”shesaidproudly.Sheevenfoundhermissingshoe.Sheranintothelivingroom.“Grandma！Comeandsee.Icleanedmyroomandfoundmyshoe.”GrandmalookedinEmma’sroom.“Ifyouhadkeptitthisway,youwouldn’thavelostyourshoe.Comeandhavesomesweetsnow，”shesaid.,优点英语艾玛坐在床上哭了很长时间。然后她擦了擦眼睛，开始打扫房间。她花了两个小时才打扫房间。“我做了！”她骄傲地说。她甚至找到了她丢失的鞋子。她跑进客厅。“奶奶！”来看看吧。我打扫了我的房间，找到了我的鞋子。奶奶看着艾玛的房间。“如果你一直这样做，你就不会丢鞋了。现在就来吃点糖果吧，”她说。Emmaandhergrandmaweresittingatthetable，eatingwhenhermom，dad，andRyancamehome.“Well，lookatEmma’sroom！It’sclean，”herdadsaid.“Howwasthezoo？Didyouhavefun？IwishIcouldhavegonetherewithyou，”Emmasaid.“Ifyoukeepyourroomclean，wemaygoandseeanimalsagain，”hermomsaid.Fromthenon，Emmatriedherbesttokeepherroomclean.艾玛和奶奶坐在桌边吃饭，妈妈、爸爸和瑞恩回家。“嗯，看看艾玛的房间！它很干净，”她爸爸说，“动物园怎么样？你玩得开心吗？我希望我能和你一起去，”艾玛说。“如果你保持房间干净，我们可以再去看动物，”她妈妈说。从那时起，艾玛就尽力保持她的房间干净。Part4:高考真题再现【真题1】2021年1月浙江卷：万圣节南瓜卡头：阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.Mydadhasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage—Icarriedan85-pounderbacklastyear.Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.I’munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ibentoverandpressedmyhead,优点英语againsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynosebrieflypreventedentry.FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(软木塞)forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththehugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.Myexcitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I’mgoingtosetitdown,now,”Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican’tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________,优点英语优秀范文1Itwasfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger. Theairinsidethehollowvegetablewasfullofmyanxiousbreath.Icouldhearmysister’slaughterand Jason’smuffledvoicetalkingaboutcuttingthegiantthingopen.“No!Notmyprecious pumpkin!”Iprotested.Eventually, Dad helpedmeadjustmybodytoamorerelaxedposition,and pulled thepumpkingentlyoffmy head.Hairinknots, nose andchaincoveredinpumpkinflesh,Iletoutasighofrelief.That’swhenIrealizedthecamerahadbeenrollingthewholetime!ThevideowaspostedonlinetheMondaybeforeHalloween.Ilookedjustlikeapumpkinheadinit.Embarrassedandalittleannoyed,Ifledtomyroom,but Mom stoppedme.“Youhaven’treadthecommentsyet.”IscrolleddownthescreenandmarveledatthestoriestheviewerssharedaboutHalloween.Onegirlrecalledcelebratingitwithherbrothersandsisters,andthankedusfor“bringingherhome”.Thewordsbroughtwarmthtomyheartandtearstomyeyes.Ifeltluckytobeapartofthismischievousyetlovingfamily.(171words)出彩表达积累（出自原文及范文）1.hollow adj. 中空的；空心的2.muffled adj.沉闷的；模糊不清的3.sigh n.叹气；叹息4.marvel v.感到惊奇；大为赞叹5.mischievous adj.顽皮的；捣蛋的6.scrolldown 向下滚动7.Eventually,Dadhelpedmeadjustmybodytoamorerelaxedposition,andpulledthepumpkingentlyoffmyhead.最后，爸爸帮我把身体调整到一个比较放松的姿势，轻轻地把南瓜从我头上扯下来。（对动作的生动描写）8.Thewordsbroughtwarmthtomyheartandtearstomyeyes.这些话温暖了我的心，使我热泪盈眶。（对神态的生动描写）优秀范文2,优点英语Itwasfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Jason suggestedusingaknifetocutthe pumpkin open.Iwavedmyhandswildlyinprotestattheplan.“Thenyouneedtofindawayof pulling yourselfout.”My dad saidinacalm,coolvoice.Hisvoicesettledmynerves.Iwasconsciousthatmy nose wasactingasanimpedimenttomyescape.Withstretchingoutmyfaceandbitingintothepumpkin,Isurmountedthelargeobstacleand managed topullmy head out.ArippleofexcitementranthroughusbutthefirstthingIsawwasthecamera.ThevideowaspostedonlinetheMondaybeforeHalloween. Inthespaceofaweek,ithadbeenviewedoveramilliontimes.Itfilled Mom withgreaterastonishment.Rarelyhadapumpkin’svideohadsomanyhitsasthisone.Dangerousasitis,someviewers’curiositywastoostrongtoresist.Theyleftmessagesdescribingthefeelingstheyhadwhilewatchingit.Somelaughedatme,whileotherspraisedmyparents,whoremainedcalmthroughout.Lookingthroughthesereviews,thesunlightpeekingthroughour,Dad’scalmsmilereflectedhismotto“All’swellwithus,neverfear”.(186words)出彩表达积累（出自原文及范文）1. nerve n.神经质；神经紧张2. conscious adj.意识到；注意到3. impediment n.妨碍；阻碍；障碍4. surmount v.克服；解决5. obstacle n.障碍；阻碍；绊脚石6. ripple n.波纹；细浪；涟漪7. Hisvoicesettledmynerves. 他的声音使我安定下来。（无灵主语）8. ItfilledMomwithgreaterastonishment.这使母亲尤为惊讶。（对情绪的生动描写）【真题2】2017年浙江卷：健忘而可爱的妈妈阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。A vacationwithmymother,优点英语 Ihadaninterestingchildhood:Itwasfilledwithsurpriseandamusements,allbecauseofmymother-loving,sweet,andyet absent-minded and forgetful.Onestrangefamily trip wetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther. MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached, David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe’deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games, camping equipment,anda tent intothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe’dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler’schecks Mom hadforgotten. DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhile Dadslept:”YoustandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileIgo,andI’llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids?”“What?!Oh,Gosh…Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.”Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren’tabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehad trouble findingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn’twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections.Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorsteps,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldasas nice assheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown. 注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1 Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.,优点英语_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2 Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________优秀范文Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Butthenwewerehalfanhourawayfromthehotel,wherethetentwasleftbehind.Dadrecommendedbuyinganewone,whileMominsistedonourgoingbacktofetchit,saying"Forgetfulpeoplelikememaylosethingsrepeatedly,soit'sunwisetogiveupthetent."Finally,wegotbackthetentandhittheroadagain.IfMomhadn'tbeenthatabsent-minded,itwouldhavesavedusthetroubleofgoingbackagainandagain.Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Oneday,towardsevening,wefoundagreatcampingsiteatthefootofahighmountain.DavidandIhelpedDadputupthetent,andMomwasbusypreparingsupper.Whenthesettingsuncastanorangelightoverthemountains,thetentwassetupandthemealwasready.Sittingaroundthecampfire,wetalkedandlaughed.EverytimewementionedthefunnyincidentsofthejourneyapleasantsmilewouldspreadoverMom'sface.解析文章中文大意：我的母亲很健忘（absent-mindedandforgetful），一家四口去祖父母在的省自驾旅游，途中发生了有趣的事情，比如爸爸叫我盯住妈妈，以防她开车的时候睡着：第一段开头句：我们拿出来新买的帐篷第二段开头句：我们愉快地欣赏路边的景色关键词：momdad David（弟弟）,tent,camping,nice,trouble,forgetful,absent-minded,优点英语实战解析首先，根据文章当中第二段内容比较开心的基调，第一段的故事情节应该比较偏向正面感情色彩，例如：我们在露营过程中一起搭建帐篷的开心时光或露营过程中的趣事（尤其是前文有铺垫妈妈是个forgetful的人，这一点也可以埋下伏笔来表达后面过程中由于妈妈健忘而带来的趣事）（也有同学在此处描述了露营过程中对其他陌生人提供帮助，来集中体现nice这一个点）；其次，第二段开头说来描述欣赏风景：此处可以用一些描述景色环境的表达来烘托下氛围，但是第二段不能仅仅只有景色描述；例如：这里可以实写和虚写结合的方式，看到景色（同时回忆往事），最终把故事的落脚点放在"家人的感情""亲情""生活的乐趣""与妈妈一起的趣事"等等角度都可以的；当然也有同学描述与陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意这个主题；总之这次的话题比较开放，情节可以写的角度比较多；再次，除了情节方面的内容以外，以下几个方面是考生需要着重关注的得分点：字迹清晰程度，语法多样性和句式丰富性，衔接成分的使用，语言的场景恰当程度；高考英语写作中，考生所采用的句型结构一定程度上影响了老师对考生写作水平的判断；说到语法丰富性方面，例如在作文中用到从句结构、强调句、非谓语结构等。尤其应该注意的是：避免句型单一化，如通篇使用定语从句，这样反而使阅卷老师觉得该考生对句型掌握的不够充分。应该在文章写作中有意识地多使用不同的句型结构。例如：Theysaiditwassuchabeautifuldaythattheywouldrememberitforever.（such…that结构）。 由于阅卷老师在评卷时的时间十分有限，在作文中放入显耀的连接词可以帮助老师快速抓住文章结构，促使老师更好地理解文章主旨，同时清晰的连接词可以显示作者写作时严谨的逻辑。例如：uponone'sarrival,then,however,besides,while等。
