优点英语2020-2021学年高二英语热点写作提升专练(通用版)热点02.慰问信+读后续写+概要写作1.假定你是李华，从网上得知你的英国朋友David得了流感（flu)。请你就此给他写封英文邮件，内容包括：1.关心病情；2.给予建议；3.表达愿望。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】DearDavid，I’msorrytohearthatyouareinhospitalbecauseyougotafluthesedays.I’mwritingtosendyoumywarmestregardsandalsosharewithyousometipsonhowtostayhealthy.Agoodlifestylewillhelpyourecoverfromtheflu.First，you’dbetterkeepabalanceddiet，eatingmorefreshvegetablesandfruits.Second，takingregularexerciseisalsoimportant,sotrytoexerciseeverydaytobuildupastrongbody.Andfinallymakesureyougetenoughsleepandneverstayuptoolateatnight.Ihopemyadvicecanbehelpfulandthatyouwillgetbettersoon.Yourssincerely,LiHua【解析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生给英国朋友David写封邮件，慰问他的病情、给予建议并表达祝愿。第一步：审题,优点英语体裁：应用文时态：根据提示，时态主要为一般现在时。结构：总分法要求：1.关心病情；2.给予建议；3.表达愿望。第二步:列提纲（重点词组）regard；sharewith；stayhealthy；recoverfrom；balance；regular；buildup;makesure第三步：连词成句1.I’msorrytohearthatyouareinhospitalbecauseyougotafluthesedays.2.I’mwritingtosendyoumywarmestregardsandalsosharewithyoursometipsonhowtostayhealthy.3.Agoodlifestylewillhelpyoukeeprecoverfromtheflu.4.Firstyou’dbetterkeepabalanceddiet,eatingmorefreshvegetablesandfruits.5.Secondtakingregularexerciseisalsoimportant,sotrytoexerciseeverydaytobuildupastrongbody.6.Andfinallymakesureyougetenoughsleepandneverstayuptoolateatnight.7.Ihopemyadvicecanbehelpfulandthatyouwillgetbettersoon.根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）1.表文章结构顺序：First,Second,Finally,2.表并列补充关系：Whatismore,Besides,Moreover,Furthermore,InadditionAswellas,notonly…but(also),including(供参考)3.表转折对比关系：However,Onthecontrary,but,Although+clause(从句),Inspiteof+n/doing,Ontheonehand…,Ontheotherhand…Some…,whileothers…,asfor,so…that…（供参考）4.表因果关系：Because,As,So,Thus,Therefore,Asaresult（供参考）连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。【范文点评】[高分句型1]I’msorrytohearthatyouareinhospitalbecauseyougotafluthesedays.that引导宾语从句。[高分句型2]Firstyou’dbetterkeepabalanceddieteatingmorefreshvegetablesandfruits.,优点英语现在分词作伴随状语。[高分句型3]Secondtakingregularexerciseisalsoimportant,sotrytoexerciseeverydaytobuildupastrongbody.So引导结果状语从句。2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Mama'sbankaccountEverySaturdaynightMamawouldsitdownbythekitchentableandcountoutthemoneyPapahadbroughthome.“Fortherent.”Mamawouldcountoutthebigsilverpieces.“Forthegroceries.”Anothergroupofcoins.“I'llneedanotebook.”ThatwouldbemysisterChristine,mybrotherNelsorme.Mamawouldputoneortwocoinstotheside.Wewouldwatchwithanxiousinterest.Atlast,Papawouldask,“Isthatal!"AndwhenMamanodded,wecouldrelaxalittle.Mamawouldlookupandsmile,“Good.WedonothavetogototheBank.”WewereallsoproudofMama'sBankAccount.Itgaveussuchawarm,securefeeling.WhenNelsgraduatedfromgrammarschool,hewantedtogoontohighschool.“Itwillcostalittlemoney,”hesaid.Eagerlywegatheredaroundthetable.ItookdownaboxandlaiditcarefullyinfrontofMama.Thiswasthe“LittleBank”.Itwasusedforsuddenemergencies,suchasthetimewhenChristinebrokeherarmandhadtobetakentoadoctor.Nelslistedthecostsofthethingshewouldneed.MamacountedoutthemoneyintheLittlebank.Therewasnotenough.“WedonotwanttogototheBank,”shereminded.Weallshookourheads.“IwillworkinDilon'sgroceryafterschool,”Nelsvolunteered.Mamagavehimabrightsmileandwrotedownanumber.“That'snotenough,”Papasaid.Thenhetookhispipeoutofhismouthandlookedatitforalongtime.“Iwillgiveupsmoking,”hesaidsuddenly.MamareachedacrossthetableandtouchedPapa'sarm.Thenshewrotedownanotherfigure.“IwilllookaftertheElvingtonchildreneveryFridaynight,”Isaid.“Christinecanhelpme.”Nowtherewasenoughmoney.WeallfeltverygoodbecausewedidnothavetogodowntownanddrawmoneyoutofMama'sBankAccount.IoftendreamedofaddingsomemoneytotheBankAccountsomeday.Andthatwastwentyyearsago.注意：,优点英语1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。Paragraph1:LastyearIsoldmyfirststoryandgotsomemoney.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Mamalookedatmeandsaid,“Thereisnoaccount.”__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Paragraph1:LastyearIsoldmyfirststoryandgotsomemoney. MyfirstintentwastospendthefortuneinrenovatingthehouseIrecentlyboughtdowntownorpayingoffitsmortgage.Onsecondthought,however,IbetthingswouldbebetterifItookthefirstflighthomeanddepositedthemoneytomymother’ssecretbankdowntown.Afterall,ithadbeentenyearssincepapapassedawayandmomstubbornlyrefusedtomoveinwithanyofus.Actingonasuddenimpulse,Itookaflighthomethatnight,flewintomymother’slittleroomandhandedherthestackofmoney.“Mom,putitinyourbankaccount.”Iblurtedout,eyeingherintently.Paragraph2:Mamalookedatmeandsaid,“Thereisnoaccount.” momconfessedslowlybutseriously.“Butthatbankaccountiswhatyouhavebeentellingusinthepast25years.Itkeepsourfamilysafeandconfidentwheneverlifeishardup.“That’strue,mykid.Iwantthatimaginaryaccountgivesyouasenseofsecurity,thelaststrawwecouldturntointhemostdreadfulcircumstances.Butremember,thatconjured-upaccountisnotmoreimportantthanyourownpositiveattitude,yourwillingnesstofightforabetterlife,yourtenacityandendurance.”Inoddedfirmlytomymother’steachinginmymistyeyes,deeplyappreciatingheryear-longwhitelieandtheinvaluablelessonshetaughtmethatnight.【解析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者的母亲有一个令人感到安全的银行账户，作者一家凭借着这样的安全感，度过了艰难的时光。,优点英语1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“去年，我卖掉了我的第一篇稿子，赚了些钱。”可知，第一段可描写作者想在母亲的银行账户里存钱。②由第二段首句内容“妈妈看了看我说：‘没有银行账户。’”可知，第二段可描写作者母亲向作者解释自己曾经的善意的谎言。2.续写线索：回家——给钱——拒绝——解释——感激3.词汇激活行为类① 回家：returnhome/gohome② 存钱：savemoney/putaway③ 承认：admit/acknowledge情绪类① 固执：beobstinate/stubborn② 严肃：beserious/solemn/earnest③ 感激：showinghisappreciation/showhisgratitude/begrateful【范文点评】[高分句型1].Onsecondthought,however,IbetthingswouldbebetterifItookthefirstflighthomeanddepositedthemoneytomymother’ssecretbankdowntown.（由连词if引导条件状语从句）[高分句型2].Iblurtedout,eyeingherintently.（现在分词短语作伴随状语）[高分句型3].Butthatbankaccountiswhatyouhavebeentellingusinthepast25years.（由what引导表语从句）3.阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。Francehasbecomethefirstcountrytobansupermarketsfromthrowingawayunsoldfood.Thenewlaw,whichwaspassed,requiressupermarketstodonateunsoldfoodtocharitiesandfoodbanks.Ifsupermarketsdonotobeythelaw,theyfacea$4,000fine.Eachyear,Francethrowsawayabout7milliontonsoffood.Thatisone-fifthoftheamountoffoodboughteachyear.Alongwithindividualconsumers,restaurantsandstoresaddtothefoodwaste.OtherEuropeancountriesarealsomakingeffortstoreducefoodwaste.InDenmark,anew“waste”,优点英语supermarkethasopened,wherecustomerscanbuyleftoverfoodatcheaperprices.ArashDerambarshisamunicipalcouncilor(市议员)inParis.Hestartedapetition(请愿书）totheFrenchparliamenttoadoptthesupermarketfoodwastelaw.“Thesituationisverysimple,”hesaid.“Ontheonehand,wehavesupermarketsthatthrowawaykilosofunsoldfoodeveryday.Ontheother,wehavemillionsofpoorpeopleinFrance.”DerambarshpublishedabookcalledManifestoAgainstWaste.Inthebook,hewroteabouthisexperienceasapoorstudentbarelyabletopayforrent.“Iwashungryandashamedofadmittingit.Iwantedtoturnitintoapositiveexperiencesootherswouldnotendupinthissituation.”DerambarshisnowcampaigningfortheEuropeanUniontoadoptsimilarsupermarketwastelaws.HeisurgingtheUnitedStatesandothercountriestoadoptsuchmeasures,too.Somepeoplewelcomethenewlaw.LouiseSaint-Germainispresidentofasmallnon-govemmentalorganization.Shesaidtheincreaseindonationwillallowhergroupto“feedmorepeopleandprovideamorediversifiedfoodbasket.’’Butothersareworriedthelawwillleadtomoredonationsthantheycanhandle.AlineChassagnotmanagesaSalvationArmystore.“Wesimplydon’thavethetechnicalandlogistical(后勤的)abilitytohandoutmorefoodtomorepeople.Andwe’renottheonlyones,”shesaid.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Inordertoreduceseriousfoodwaste,Francepassedalawtorequiresupermarketstodonateunsoldfood.(要点1)OtherEuropeancountriesalsotakemeasurestohandlethisissue.(要点2)ArashDerambarshdidalotfortheimplementationofthenewlawandappealedtotheEuropeanUnionandothercountriestoadoptsimilarlaws.(要点3)Somepeoplesupportthenewlawforitwillbenefitpeopleinneedwhileothersworryitishardtocarryouttosomedegree.(要点4)【解析】这是一篇概要写作。写作步骤1,优点英语）细读原文。首先要仔细阅读短文，掌握文章主旨和结构，明确各段的大意。文章主要说明了为了减少严重的食物浪费，法国通过了一项法律，要求超市捐赠未售出的食物。其他欧洲国家也采取了措施来处理这个问题。ArashDerambarsh为新法律的实施做了很多工作，他呼吁欧盟和其他国家通过类似的法律。一些人支持新的法律，因为它将造福于需要的人，而其他人担心它很难在某种程度上实施。2）弄清要求。新高考的概要写作是写全文概要，不是写某一部分的概要，或者就某些问题写出要点。3）列出原文要点。解析原文的内容和结构，将内容分项扼要表述并注意在结构上的顺序。在此基础上选出与文章主题密切相关的部分。4）在写作时要特别注意下面几点：（1）概要应包括原文中的主要事实，略去不必要的细节。（2）安排好篇幅的比例，概要应同原文保持协调，即用较多的文字写重要内容，用较少的文字写次要内容。（3）注意要点之间的衔接，要用适当的关联词语贯通全文，切忌只简单地写出一些互不相干的句子，但也不要每两句之间都加关联词语，以免显得生硬。（4）不排斥用原文的某些词句，但不要照搬原文的句子，如果不能完全用自己的话语表达，至少对原文句子做一些同义词替换，如果结构上也能有一些转换会更好。（5）计算词数，看是否符合规定的词数要求。【范文点评】本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：inorderto；foodwaste；donate；takemeasuresto；appealto；adopt等高级词汇；Somepeoplesupportthenewlawforitwillbenefitpeopleinneedwhileothersworryitishardtocarryouttosomedegree.运用原因状语从句等高级句式。
