专题10读后续写高分技巧综合训练一、请运用所学技巧翻译下面的段落。（一）Jim看到袭击者逃进了黑暗中，他想到了那个姑娘。Jim仍然喘着粗气，朝着她走去。那姑娘坐在灌木丛后面哭着。尽管Jim在黑暗中几乎看不清那姑娘，他还是能确定地感觉到她惊魂未定。Jim不想再吓着她，他隔开一定距离和她说话。Jim轻轻地告诉她袭击者已经逃跑了，她安全了。姑娘许久没说话，接着他吃惊地听到姑娘问道：“是你吗，爸爸？”【参考范文】Seeingtheattackerflee/disappear/runintothedarkness,Jimthoughtofthegirl.Stillbreathingheavily,Jimwalkedtowardsher.Thegirlwassittingbehindthebushes,sobbing.AlthoughinthedarknessJimcouldhardlyseethegirlclearly,hecouldsensehertremblingalarmwithcertainty.Toavoidfrighteningthegirlfurther,Jimspoketoheratadistance.Inasoftvoice,Jimtoldherthattheattackerhadrunawayandthatshewassafe.Therewasalongsilenceandtheninastonishmentheheardthegirlask,“Dad,isthatyou?”【点评】这篇短文用到了前面学过的Ving、副词和介词短语，丰富了表达形式，使情感描写和动作描写更加细腻生动。（二）第二天，Meg去跟Mrs.Gilson解释了她为什么不交回家作业。为了不让同学知道这件事，她趁没人注意时悄悄地溜进了Mrs.Gilson的办公室。Meg低着头，她告诉了Mrs.Gilson她的回家作业找不到了。“我保证我完成了回家作业。。。。。。”她解释道，眼里含着泪。见此情景，Mrs.Gilson打断了她。她笑着告诉Meg她已经在上一天把她的作业和试卷一起交起来了。她知道Meg不会因为偷懒而说谎。听到Mrs.Gilson的话，Meg如释重负。她开心地笑了，眼里的泪水落了下来。【参考范文】Thenextday,MegwenttotellMrs.Gilsonwhyshecouldn’thandinherhomework.Toavoidbeingknownbyherclassmates,shesecretlyslidintoMrs.Gilson’sofficewithoutbeingnoticed.Herheaddrooped,MegtoldMrs.Gilsonthetruththatshejustcouldnotfindherhomework.“IpromisethatIdidfinishmyhomeworkand…”sheexplained,tearswellingupinhereyes/eyesbrimmingwithtears.Seeingthis,Mrs.Gilsoninterruptedher.Withasmile,shetoldMegthatshehadhandedinherhomeworkwithherpaperthedaybefore.SheknewMegwasnotlyingbecauseoflaziness.Hearingthis,Megfeltasurgeofrelief.Shesmiledbrightly,dropsoftearsrolling5\ndownhercheeks.【点评】这篇短文用到了前面学过的Ving、副词、介词短语、情绪表达和独立结构，尤其是独立结构。文中三处使用了独立结构，生动细腻地描写了Meg的情感变化。二、阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。AFromthefirstdayheenteredmyclassroom,WillardP.Frankexistedinhisownworld,shuttingouthisclassmatesandme.Myattemptsatbuildingafriendlyrelationshipwithhimweremetwithcompleteindifference.Icouldseethathisclassmatesfarednobetter.Willardwasstrictlyalonerwhoseemedtohavenodesireorneedtobreakhissilence．ShortlyaftertheThanksgivingholiday,wereceivedwordoftheannualChristmascollectionofmoneyforthelessfortunatepeopleinourschooldistrict.“Christmasisaseasonofgiving，”Itoldmystudents.“Thereareafewstudentsintheschoolwhomightnothaveahappyholidayseason.BycontributingtoourChristmascollection,youwillhelpbuyfood,clothingandtoysfortheseneedypeople.Wewillstartthecollectiontomorrow.”WhenIcalledforthecontributionsthenextday,IdiscoveredthatalmosteveryonehadforgottenexceptforWillardP.Frank.Theboydugdeepintohispantspocketsashewalkedslowlytomydesk.Carefully,hedroppedtwoquartersintothesmallcontainer.“Idon’tneedmilkforlunch，”hemumbled.Foramoment,justamoment,hesmiled.Thenheturnedandwalkedbacktohisdesk.Thatnight,afterschool,Itookourfewcontributionstotheschoolprincipal.Icouldn’thelpsharingtheincidentthathadtakenplace.“Imaybewrong,butIbelieveWillardmightbegettingreadytobecomeapartoftheworldaroundhim,”Itoldtheprincipal.“Yes.”henodded.“Andwemightdowelltohavehimshareabitofhisworldwithus.IjustreceivedalistofthepoorfamiliesinourschoolwhomostneedhelpthroughtheChristmascollection.Here,takealookatit.”AsIgazeddowntoread,IdiscoveredWillardP.Frankandhisfamilywerethetopnamesonthelist.Seeingthis,Idecidedtodosomethingforhim．注意：1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2．应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；5\n4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1：OnthatSunday,IpaidavisittoWillard’sfamily._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Thenextday,IhadaspecialclassforWillard.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Paragraph1：OnthatSunday,IpaidavisittoWillard’sfamily.Onenteringhishouse,Iwassurprisedtofindabarelyemptyroomwithonlyabrokenbedandadirtysecondhandsofa.Willardtoldmethathismotherdiedafewyearsagoandthathisfatherwasmissing,leavinghimtolivewithasickgrandma.Whenaskedwhyhehadgiventhetwoquarters,_Willardmumbled,_“Therearepeoplepoorerthanme,soIjustwanttodosomehelpbycontributingmymilkmoney.”Hearinghiswords,Icouldn’thelpburstingintotears.IthoughtIshouldhelphimbreakhissilence.Paragraph2：Thenextday,IhadaspecialclassforWillard.Isharedhisstorywiththewholeclassandsaid,“Now,onbehalfofthepeopleinneed,IshouldsaythankyouWillard,youaregreat！”Afterasilence,allthestudentsclapped,saying,“Willard,youaregreat!Willard,youaregreat！”andtheywalkedslowlytohimandhuggedhimtightly.AfriendlyrelationshipwasbuiltandWillard’ssilencewasbrokenbyasmileonhisface.【点评】故事内容连贯，情节感人，与所给材料前后呼应，自成一体。表达形式丰富，能熟练使用现在分词和过去分词。BAfriendofmine,namedJack,receivedanexpensivecarfromhisbrotherasaChristmaspresent.OnChristmasEvewhenJackcameoutofhisoffice,astreeturchin(顽童)waswalkingaroundtheshiningcar.“Isthisyourcar,sir?”Heasked.Jackanswered,“Yes,mybrothergaveittomeforChristmas.”Theboywassurprised.“Youmeanyourbrothergaveittoyouanditdidcostyounothing?Sir,Iwish…”Hehesitated.Jackthoughtofcourseheknewwhattheboywanted,butwhattheboysaidsurprisedhimgreatly.“Iwish,”theboywenton,“thatIcouldbea5\nbrotherlikethat.”Jacklookedattheboyinsurprise,andthenhesaidagain,“Wouldyouliketotakearideinmycar?”“Ohyes,I’d loveto,”theboyanswered.Afterashortride,theboyturnedandwithhiseyesshining,said,“Sir,wouldyouminddrivinginfrontofmyhouse?”Jacksmiledalittle.Hethoughtheknewwhattheboywanted.Hewantedtoshowhisneighborsthathecouldridehomeinabigcar.ButJackwaswrongagain.“Willyoustopwherethosetwostepsare?”Theboyasked.注意：1.所续写的短文词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为二段，每段的开头语已经为你写好；4续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1Hegotoutandranuptothesteps._________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2Jackgotoutandliftedtheboytothefrontseatofhiscar._________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Paragraph1：Hegotoutandranuptothesteps.TheninashortwhileJackheardhimcomingback,buthewasnotcomingfast.Hewascarryinghislittlecrippled(残疾的)brother.ThenheCheerfullysatdownonthestep,pointingtothecar.“Thereheis,Buddy,justlikeItoldyouupstairs.HisbrothergaveittohimforChristmasanditdidn’tcosthimacent.AndsomedayI’mgoingtogiveyouonejustlikeit…thenyoucanseeforyourselfallthenicethingsintheChristmaswindowsthatI’vebeentryingtotellyouabout.”Paragraph2：Jackgotoutandliftedtheboytothefrontseatofhiscar.Theshining-eyedelderbrotherclimbedinbesidehimandthethreebegananunforgettableholidayride,lookingatallthosebeautifulthings.ThatChristmasEve,Jacklearnedtherealmeaningofthewords:“It’smore5\nblessedtogivethantoreceive.”Healsolearnedwhatitmeanstobe“anelderbrotherlikethat.”【点评】故事流畅，情节充满正能量，与所给材料首尾呼应，构思巧妙，结尾出乎意料。词汇丰富，句式多样，表达准确。5
