优点英语专题22读后续写【2021年】1.（2021·全国高考新高考Ⅰ卷）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右。2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.,优点英语________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Father’sappearingwaslikeasaviortothetwochildren.Undertheguidanceoftheirfather,theytookpositiveactionsandstartedalloveragain.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,whichwasthekeytosuccess.Itwasallrightthistime.Deliciousbreakfastwasready.Howhappytheywere!Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn’texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,“HappyMother’sDay!”Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.【分析】本文以母亲节为线索展开，讲述了双胞胎Jenna和Jeff为了献给母亲一份美味的早餐，自己动手，做起饭餐来，但是不幸的是，他们连连失败，后来在父亲的帮助下，获得成功，他们把早餐献给亲爱的母亲，妈妈非常感动的故事。【解析】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“当双胞胎失望地环顾四周时，他们的父亲出现了。”可知，第一段可描写他们的父亲指导帮助他们准备早餐。②由第二段首句内容“这对双胞胎把早餐端到楼上，叫醒了他们的母亲。”可知，第二段可描写母亲收到孩子们的礼物早餐，非常感动。2.续写线索：帮助——指导——积极——献礼——感动3.词汇激活行为类①帮助：help/assist②.指导：guide/conduct③.献礼：presentagift/giveagift情绪类①.积极：positive/positively/takepositiveactions②.感动：moved/touched【点睛】,优点英语[高分句型1].Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,whichwasthekeytosuccess.(which引导的非限制性定语从句)[高分句型2].Itwasnotonlythebreakfast,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.(使用notonly…but(also)句型及强调句型)2.（2021·浙江6月卷）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事，Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn'tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Fromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.Ididn'treallyunderstandhisworldeither:Hewasalivestocktrucker,andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass(超过)anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone(长号).ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask,thetractorfiredupandwewereoff,ridingdownthefieldlookingforweedstospraywithchemicals.Afterashortway,thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover,butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs,lamb's-quarters,foxtails,andthekingofweeds,theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.Athome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn'tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。,优点英语Paragraph1：Thepayarrivedatlast.Paragraph2：Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.【答案】Thepayarrivedatlast.Althoughthejobwasvery tiring,IwasveryhappyinmyheartforIgotsomethingfrommywork.Thetoiloflaborwasforgottenforthetimebeing.IthoughtIshouldhavemyownmoneyandplannedhowtospendit.“Howmuchmoneyhaveyouearned?”Dadasked.Iwassurprised,reluctanttosaymyincome.Thenextmorning,mydad’slivestocktruckstartedrunning.Isawmyfather’shard-workingfigureandthoughtofhiswords“Ajob’sabigsteptogrowingup”.Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswere worriedabout.TheywereworriedthatIwastooselfishtogive.Irealizedthatmylaborwasveryhard,butmygrowthandourwholefamilyhadbeendependingonthehardworkofmyparents!Dadnevercomplainedaboutunfairness!Heevenseemedtothinkthatwasfair.Ithought,“I’veonlyworkedfortwoweeks,buthowmanyyearsmyfatherhasworked!”Intheevening,Dadcameback.IproudlytookoutmyownmoneyandhandedittoDad.【分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者高中毕业后，参加农场工作，辛辛苦苦挣到的钱，不情愿贡献给家庭，后来在看到父亲的辛劳之后，理解了父母担心的是自己太过自私而不知奉献，终于想通，并自豪地将自己劳动所得交给父亲的故事。【解析】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“工资终于到了。”可知，第一段可描写作者的工资到手后，高兴地计划自己用这笔钱，不愿意交给父亲，然后看到父亲的辛劳。②由第二段首句内容“我立刻明白了父母的担心。”可知，第二段可描写作者明白了父母担心自己不懂得奉献，想通了，然后自豪地把钱交给了父亲。2.续写线索：高兴——计划——不情愿——发现——奉献——自豪,优点英语3.词汇激活行为类①计划：programme/plan②.奉献：give/devote③发现：see/find情绪类①.不情愿的：unwilling/reluctant②.自豪地：proudly/withpride【点睛】[高分句型1].IthoughtIshouldhavemyownmoneyandplannedhowtospendit.(运用了疑问词加动词不定式作宾语)[高分句型2].I realized thatmylaborwasveryhard,butmygrowthandourwhole family had(that引导的宾语从句以及过去完成进行时)3.（2021·浙江1月卷）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Pumpkin(南瓜)carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.Mydadhasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage-Icarriedan85-pounderbacklastyear.Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.I’munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynosebrieflypreventedentry.FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(软木塞)forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththehugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.Myexcitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I’mgoingtosetitdown,now,”Isaid,andwith,优点英语Jasonhelpingtosupportitsweight，Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican’tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1Itwasfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Paragraph2ThevideowaspostedtheMondaybeforeHalloween.【答案】Paragraph1Itwasfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Dadwassummoned–less,itseemed,inexpectationofpracticalhelpthantomakesurehedidn’tmissoutonthespectacle.Iheardhimproposecallingthefiredepartment.“Staytuned,”saidMom;she’dmentionedshewasgoingtouploadthevideotoFacebook,butitwasonlythenIrealizedshe’dbeenfilmingthewholetime.Thevideocutsbeforemyrescue—DadgotmetopushmyheadfartherintothepumpkinsoMomcouldreachinandundotherubberbandroundmyponytail.Iemergedwithsquash-conditionedhair,asorechinandmynosepluggedwithpulp.Paragraph2ThevideowaspostedtheMondaybeforeHalloween.Bytheendofthatday,ithadover1,000views.PeopleaskedMomtoputitonYouTube,andbyWednesdaymorningweweregetting5:00amcallsfromTVbreakfastshowsandthentheinternationalmedia–thevideostartedrackinguphundredsofthousandsofviews.WhenIwentonayouthcamp,IwasrecognizedbychildrenI’dnevermet.Thepumpkinalsobecameaminorcelebrity.Passersbyandtrick-or-treaterswouldknockandask,“WhichisRachel’spumpkin?”beforetakingselfieswithit.【分析】,优点英语本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者家有在万圣节雕刻南瓜的传统，今年也不例外，家里所有人都在厨房的餐桌上辛勤地工作着，而作者的妈妈则在拍摄一年一度的活动。结果作者将头伸进了南瓜里，被卡住了，无论如何也无法挣脱出来，妈妈却趁机拍下了这一幕，后来作者得救，视频也被上传到网上走红，这段视频开始获得数十万的点击量。【解析】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“虽然时间只过去了五、六分钟，但还是感觉要长得多。”可知，第一段可描写作者是如何在爸爸的帮助下得救的。②由第二段首句内容“这段视频是在万圣节前的周一发布的。”可知，第二段可描写作者头被卡在南瓜里这段视频在网上的走红情况，以及视频走红对作者家和作者的影响。2.续写线索：爸爸被喊来帮忙——妈妈拍下了全过程——作者得救——视频被上传——视频走红——视频对作者家和作者的影响3.词汇激活行为类确保：makesure/guarantee打算做某事：begoingtodosth./intendtodosth.出来：emerge/comeout情绪类实际：practical/useful出名：becomeaminorcelebrity/befamous【点睛】[高分句型1]WhenIwentonayouthcamp,IwasrecognizedbychildrenI’dnevermet.(运用了when引导时间状语从句)[高分句型2]Passersbyandtrick-or-treaterswouldknockandask,“WhichisRachel’spumpkin?”beforetakingselfieswithit.(运用了动名词作宾语)【2020年】1.（2020年7月，浙江高考）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Onefall，mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”-thetownofChurchillinManitoba，Canada.,优点英语Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears-likeallwildanimals-shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI'mfacetofacewithapolarbear，Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes，thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner，ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed，andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp，whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified，ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear，hitpotshard，andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough-hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway，butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇)，Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn'tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear'spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears'eyes，butdoesn'thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand，throughthefence，sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫)，thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp._____________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived._______________________________________________________________________________________________________【解析】,优点英语本文主要讲述了人与熊对抗，之后成功脱险的故事。主人公的感情线变化为：兴奋渴望→惊恐→放松。剧情线以主人公如何与北极熊周旋并成功摆脱它展开。由第一段的段首提示句可知：几分钟后，熊又回到营地。接下来可通过场景渲染，描写当时令人颤栗惊恐的画面，例如“Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedle-likeshrillness.”这不仅合理地描写了熊的反应，也描绘出让人战栗的场景。由第二段的段首提示句可知：此时，直升机到了。如果想要进行续写两段的合理衔接，第一段的结尾可描写成“Afterthoroughlyscrutinizingthearea,thebeartrottedforwardafewsteps.”这样可以营造出危急的场景。“我们”看到直升机的到来，感到绝处逢生的喜悦，可以以人物心理描写作为第二段的开头，重点描写喜极而泣的状态，例如“MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.”最后，结尾部分需要迅速收束，并说明成功逃脱的结局。关于画线词：Elli作为女主人公，是续写内容中应该出现的画线词，noises,pictures,fence,spray与熊有关，也在两段续写内容中出现。最终，两人回归安全状态，因此画线词safe也可自然而然地出现在续写内容中。由此划分画线词，可迅速锁定需使用的画线词范围，辅助构思。【范文】Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedle-likeshrillness.ThenoisesturnedElliandIpalewithhorror.Ifearedthatthegiantwoulddestroyourwholefence.Heroaredrepeatedly,shatteringwhatwasleftofthesilence.Elliseizedthisopportunitytotakesomepicturesofthebear.Theanimal’snoisesechoedallaroundus.Webetrayedourfeelingsbyhuddlingtogether,shiveringwithfear.Afterthoroughlyscrutinizingthearea,hetrottedforwardafewsteps.Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.Elliusedpeppersprayagaintobuyusenoughtime.Butthistimethebearbecamemorealert.Heregardeduswiththemercilessnecessityofhunger,sowethrowallthefoodwehave.Hethenturnedawayandstarteddevouring.Aswewereclimbingtheropeladder,Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeandsound.2.（2020年1月，浙江高考）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。“I'mgoingtomissyousomuch,Poppy,"saidthetall,thinteenager.Hebentdowntohughisoldfriendgoodbye.Hestoodup,huggedhisparents,andsmiled,tryingnottolethisemotions(情绪)getthebetterofhim.Hisparentswerenotquiteabletokeeptheirsundercontrol.Theyhaddriventheirsonseveralhoursoutoftowntotheuniversitywherehewouldsoonbelivingandstudying.Itwastimetosaygoodbyefornowatleast.The,优点英语familyhuggedandsmiledthroughmistyeyesandthenlaughed.Theboyliftedthelastbagontohisshoulder,andflashedabrightsmile.”Iguessthisisit,“hesaid.”I'llseeyoubackhomeinamonth,okay？"Hisparentsnodded,andtheywatchedashewalkedoutofsightintothecrowdsofhundredsofstudentsandparents.Theboy'smotherturnedtothedog,“Okay,Poppy,timetogobackhome.”Thehouseseemedquietasatombwithouttheboylivingthere.Allthatweek,Poppydidn'tseeminterestedinherdinner,herfavoritetoy,oreveninherdailywalk.Herownersweresadtoo,buttheyknewtheirsonwouldbebacktovisit.Poppydidn't.Theyofferedthedogsomeofherfavoritepeanutbuttertreats.Theyevenlethersitonthesofa,buttheoldgirljustwasn'therusualcheerfulself.Herownersstartedtogetworried."WhatshouldwedotocheerPoppyup？"askedDad.“We'vetriedeverything.”“Ihaveanidea,butitmightbealittlecrazy,“smiledMom.”Withoutanybodyleftinthehousebutus,thisplacecoulduseabitoffun.Let'sgetalittledogforPoppy."Itdidn'ttakelongbeforetheywalkedthroughthefrontdoorcarryingabigbox.Poppywelcomedthemhomeasusual,butwhenshesawthebox,shestopped.Sheputhernoseonit.Hertailbeganwagging(摆动)eversoslowly,thenfasterasshecaughtthesmell.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Para1.Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para2.Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromuniversity.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】,优点英语Para1.Dadputtheboxonthegroundandopenedthetop.Ashinylittlewetnosepoppedup.Thentwofluffypaws.Nexttheboxtippedoversideways,andouttumbledamassofwigglygoldensilliness. Poppywasamazed.Shewaggedfuriously.Shebarkedwithjoy.Shesmiled,hertonguelollingoutassheinvestigatedthesurprise.Thelittlepupwasnotshyandimmediatelystartingyippingandjumpingaroundtheolderdog. “Thatdidn’ttakelong,”remarkedMom,asbothdogswentroaringaroundthehouseinanimpromptugameofchase.Dadlaughed. Para2.Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromuniversity.HehadmissedPoppyandwaslookingforwardtoseeingher.Whenhebentdowntogiveherabighug,hefelloverinsurpriseasasmallgoldencloudcameracinguptolickhisfacetoo. “Ohmygosh,whoisthis?”heexclaimed.Hisparentslaughedatthelookofshockonhisface. “That’sPee-wee,”saidDad. “Ican’tbelieveyougotyourselvesapuppy!” “Wedidn’t,”repliedMom.“ThispuppyisforPoppy!”【解析】【分析】这是一篇读后续写作文。【详解】通过阅读所给文章可知，文章讲述了男孩要去上大学，和自己的狗Poppy道别。而没有了男孩在家里，Poppy也非常想念男孩，于是男孩父母决定给Poppy买一条小狗作伴。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：爸爸打开盒子，一条可爱的小狗出现了。所以后文应该是描写买来的小狗的样子以及这两只狗的相处情况；第二段开头是：几个星期后，男孩从大学回到家里。本段应该写男孩回到家以后看到两条狗的反应，以及父母告诉男孩这条狗是买给Poppy的。续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。【点睛】本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：amassof，withjoy，lookforwardto等高级词汇；非谓语动词的运用Thelittlepupwasnotshyandimmediatelystartingyippingandjumpingaroundtheolderdog.；时间状语从句Whenhebentdowntogiveherabighug,hefelloverinsurpriseasasmallgoldencloudcameracinguptolickhisfacetoo.等高级句式。,优点英语【2019年】1.（2019年6月，浙江高考）阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。Parentseverywherepraisetheirkids.JennBerman,authorofTheAtoZGuidetoRaisingHappyandConfidentKids,says,“We’vegonetotheoppositeextremeofafewdecadesagowhenparentstendedtobemorestrict.”Bygivingkidsalotofpraise,parentsthinkthey’rebuildingtheirchildren’sconfidence,when,infact,itmaybejusttheopposite.Toomuchpraisecanbackfireand,whengiveninawaythat’sinsincere,makekidsafraidtotrynewthingsortakeariskforfearofnotbeingabletostayontopwheretheirparents’praisehasputthem.Still,don’tgotoofarintheotherdirection.Notgivingenoughpraisecanbejustasdamagingasgivingtoomuch.Kidswillfeellikethey’renotgoodenoughorthatyoudon’tcareand,asaresult,mayseenopointintryinghardfortheiraccomplishments.Sowhatistherightamountofpraise?Expertssaythatthequalityofpraiseismoreimportantthanthequantity.Ifpraiseissincereandfocusedontheeffortnottheoutcome,youcangiveitasoftenasyourchilddoessomethingthatdeservesaverbalreward.“Weshouldespeciallyrecognizeourchildren’seffortstopushthemselvesandworkhardtoachieveagoal,”saysDonahue,authorofParentingWithoutFear:LettingGoofWorryandFocusingonWhatReallyMatters.“Onethingtorememberisthatit’stheprocessnottheendproductthatmatters.”Yoursonmaynotbethebestbasketballplayeronhisteam.Butifhe’soutthereeverydayandplayinghard,youshouldpraisehiseffortregardlessofwhetherhisteamwinsorloses.Praisingtheeffortandnottheoutcomecanalsomeanrecognizingyourchildwhenshehasworkedhardtocleantheyard,cookdinner,orfinishabookreport.Butwhateveritis,praiseshouldbegivenonacase-by-casebasisandbeproportionate(相称的)totheamountofeffortyourchildhasputintoit.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Parentstendtogotoextremeswhenitcomestopraisingtheirkids.(要点一)Yet,bothtoomuchandtoolittlepraisecanbeequallydamaging.(要点二)Whengivingpraise,parentsshouldbesincereandconcentrateontheprocessinsteadoftheresult.(要点三)Similarly,theyoughttogivepraiseforhowmuchefforttheirkidshave,优点英语investedintheworkthey’reinvolvedin.(要点四)【解析】本次浙江高考书面表达采用了概要写作题型。概要写作是阅读理解和书面表达的沟通桥梁，考查的是学生在实现自由的思维表达之前，对他人的信息在理解的基础上进行概括表达的能力。选材上，提供一篇350词以内的短文，题材不限，要求考生写出一篇60词左右的内容概要。【详解】完成一篇概要写作，需要经过三个步骤，1.读懂原文，抓住段落主题句。在阅读过程中，需要准确把握文章的段落大意，学会剔除非重要信息，弄清楚不同体裁的文章的内部逻辑关系以及文章的篇章结构。2.组织语言，转换表达。在找到主题句明确全文中心的基础上，组织好语言，注重语言表达的独立性和准确性以及高级性，不全盘照抄原文句子，尽量用自己的语言转换表达，同时要注意篇幅的比例安排，用较多的文字去表达重要的内容。3.通读全文，逻辑连贯。要牢记各段落要点之间的逻辑关系和自然衔接，用恰当的关联词去连贯全文。【2018年】1.（2018年11月，浙江高考）阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。It’sareallygoodideatovisitcollegesbeforeyouapplybecausetheirwebsitescanallstarttolookandsoundthesame.Nothingwillgiveyouthesenseofwhatitwillactuallybeliketoliveonacollegecampus(校园)likevisitingandseeingforyourselfthedorms,classroomsandathleticequipmentand,ofcourse,thestudents.Itseemsalittlecrazyoncesenioryearhitstofindthetimetovisitcollegecampuses,anditcanalsobepriceyiftheschoolsyouareapplyingtohappentobemorethanacarrideaway.Butkeepinmindthatyouaremakingadecisionaboutthenextfouryearsofyourlife,anddoalltheresearchyoucantomakesureyouaremakingtherightone.There’snoexcusenottovisittheschoolsinyourlocalarea.Infact,alotofcollegeapplicationsevenaskifyouhavevisitedcampus,andobviously,ifyouliveacrossthecountrythatwon’tbeasmuchofapossibility,butifyoulivenearby,gocheckitout!Ifcampusvisitsaren’tgoingtohappenbeforeyouapply,attheveryleastyoushouldfindsometimebetweenapplyingandgettingyouracceptanceletterstovisittheschoolsyou’dliketoattend.Itcansaveyoualotofheartacheifyouruleoutnowthethingsthatyoudon’tlikeaboutcertaincampuses,thingsthatyouwouldn’tknowunlessyouactuallyvisit.Now,iftimeandmoneyaremakingitimpossible,thencheckouttheonlinecollegefairsatCollegeWeekLive.,优点英语It’sachancetochatonlinewithadmissionsofficers,students,andcollegecounselors(顾问),anditwon’tcostyouapenny!Youcanregisterforitsonlinecollegefairatcollegeweeklive.com.Whilevisitinganonlinecollegefaircan’ttaketheplaceofanactualcampusvisit,itcanbeaveryusefultoolthatalongwithallyourotherresearchwillhelpyoumakeaninformeddecisionaboutwhichcollegesoruniversitiesyou’dliketoattend._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】It’sreallyworthwhiletopayavisittotheirdesiredcollegespersonallybeforeapplying.Undoubtedly,studentsshouldvisittheirlocalcolleges,whichmaybeincludedinapplications.Atleast,theyshouldvisittheschoolandfigureoutitsrealconditionsinadvance.Forstudentswhoareshortofmoneyandtime,registeringfortheonlinecollegefairisagoodalternativetohelpthembetterunderstandschools.【解析】本文要求阅读短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要，即用尽可能少的词汇集中展现原材料的主要思想和观点。这主要是考查学生把握文章主旨大意和段落大意的能力以及总结概括能力，熟练掌握从句、非谓语动词等语法知识和遣词造句的能力。【详解】1.要先读懂、读透原作。这是准确再现原文、写好概要的前提。动笔前多读两遍原文，直至弄懂读透。2.抓住文中的关键句，确定写作主题。开头It'sareallygoodideatovisitcollegesbeforeyouapply点明了本文主题；Butkeepinmindthatyouaremakingadecisionaboutthenextfouryearsofyourlife,anddoalltheresearchyoucantomakesureyouaremakingtherightone.There’snoexcusenottovisittheschoolsinyourlocalarea.说明了去大学看看的必要性和可行性；Ifcampusvisitsaren’tgoingtohappenbeforeyouapply,attheveryleastyoushouldfindsometimebetweenapplyingandgettingyouracceptanceletterstovisittheschoolsyou’dliketoattend.在时间上提供了更多选择；iftimeandmoneyaremakingitimpossible,thencheckouttheonlinecollegefairsatCollegeWeekLive.为不能亲自去大学看的学生提供了另外一种方法。3.拟好提纲。有了提纲，写概要时就会有章法，也不会遗漏原作中的要点。4.快速成文，反复推敲。按照文章要求和拟好的提纲一气呵成，写完初稿。,优点英语5.对照修改润色，再读原文，查看是否漏掉了重要信息或主要内容。用词是否恰当，可有可无的删掉。注意词类、时态、语态的适当调整。【点睛】范文观点明确，重点突出，语言简练，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如定语从句whichmaybeincludedinapplications.和whoareshortofmoneyandtime.动名词registeringonline作主语，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。2.（2018年6月，浙江高考）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydad’sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast."Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,"hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn’tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains."Don’tbelateforsupper,"UnclePaulcried,"andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon’tgetlost!""OK!"mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.注意：（1）所续写短文的词数应为l50左右；（2）至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语：（3）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；（4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。,优点英语Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.MyhorseturnedtothelefttoavoidthelittlerabbitasIheldontightlyandtriednottofall.Thenmydadturnedaroundandshouted,“Holdon!”Allofasuddenthehorsebegantorun.Mydadtriedtokeepupbehindus.Forafewminutesmyhorsesloweddowntoatrotandthenstoppedbesideariver.Ilookedaroundandrealizedthatwewerewayoffthetrack.Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Luckilythestarscameoutandgaveusalittlelightwhenwewerelookingforthewaytothefarmhouse.Afterwhatmusthavebeenseveralhours,wesuddenlyheardthesoundofsheepinthedistance.MydadandIbothrodeourhorsestowardsthesoundofthesheep.AswegotcloserwesawUnclePaulwithaflashlightwavingusover.Whatanight!【解析】读后续写要求考生首先要读懂已有信息，不仅能读懂字面含义，还要理清文章的脉络。续篇这篇短文时，考生要搞清楚故事的发展进程、前因后果、地理位置、人物思想情感的变化等。在此基础上，考生要顺着文章的思路，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用语言表达出来。通过阅读所给文章可知，父亲带儿子去西部荒野的一个朋友家体验农场生活，见父亲和叔叔骑马，儿子也很想骑，于是亲身上马体验。根据第一段所给首句Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.这一句是故事发展的转折点，可从rabbit出现后带来的反应扩展开，可以写马的反应，也可以写人的反应，但要注意与第二段首句相呼应。第二段首句是Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.这一句呼应前文UnclePaul的叮嘱——不要误吃晚饭，可从如何寻路返回农场去写。续写时注意要使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后要用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。【2017年】1.（2017年11月，浙江高考）,优点英语阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。AVacationwithMyMotherIhadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmymother---loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe’deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe’dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler’schecksMomhadforgotten.DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:“Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout(放哨)whileIgo,andI’llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids?”“What?!Oh,Gosh…Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.”Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren’tabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn’twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections(反对).Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldisasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.______________Paragraph2:,优点英语Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.______________【答案】Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Thinkingofthistent,Momsuggestedthatwegocampinginthenextvillageinexcitement,withhereyesglittering.Consideringherenthusiasm,weallagreed.Whenthedoorofourcaropened,Momstormedoutinstantlyandurgedustoputupthetent.DavidandIwereaskedtopickupsomebranchestobuildafire.Andwhenwecameback,DadandMomhadalreadylaindownthegrasscomfortablyinfrontofthetent,talkingmerrilywithalocalboyatourage,whokeptglancingatthistentcuriously.Soonwelearntthattheboyinragsevendidn’thaveahometolivein.Ofcourse,Mom“forgot”totakethistentwithusagain.Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Andwealsohadanicetimelivingwithmygrandparentsduringthattrip.Butwhatimpressedmemostwasthattent,whichwasforgottendeliberatelybyMom.Thoughshedidlovegoingcamping,shepresentedthatpoorboywiththistentoutofsympathy.ItwasMomthatmademychildhoodcolorful.Anditwasalsoshethatshowedmethetruemeaningofgiving.【解析】这是一篇读后续写。短文叙述了作者的母亲很健忘，一家四口自驾旅游去祖父母所居住的地方，途中发生了有趣的事情。首先，根据文章当中第二段内容比较开心的基调，第一段的故事情节应该比较偏向正面感情色彩，例如：我们在露营过程中一起搭建帐篷的开心时光或露营过程中的趣事(尤其是前文有铺垫妈妈是个forgetful的人，这一点也可以埋下伏笔来表达后面过程中由于妈妈健忘而带来的趣事)(也有同学在此处描述了露营过程中对其他陌生人提供帮助，来集中体现nice这一个点);其次，第二段开头说来描述欣赏风景：此处可以用一些描述景色环境的表达来烘托下氛围，但是第二段不能仅仅只能有景色描述；例如：这里可以实写和虚写结合的方式，看到景色(同时回忆往事)，最终把故事的落脚点放在“家人的感情”“亲情”“生活的乐趣”“与妈妈一起的趣事”等等角度都可以的;当然也有同学描述与陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意这个主题;总之这次的话题比较开放，情节可以写的角度比较多;再次，除了情节方面的内容以外，以下几个方面是考生需要着重关注的得分点：字迹清晰程度，语法多样性和句式丰富性，衔接成分的使用，语言的场景恰当程度;高考英语写作中，考生所采用的句型结构一定程度上影响了老师对考生写作水平的判断;说到语法丰富性方面，例如在作文中用到从句结构、强调句、非谓语结构等。尤其应该注意的是：避免句型单一化，如通篇使用定语从句，这样反而使阅卷老师觉得该考生对句型掌握的不够充分。应该在文章写作中有意识地多使用不同的句型结构。,优点英语【点睛】文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式:虚拟语气和with复合结构Momsuggestedthatwegocampinginthenextvillageinexcitement,withhereyesglittering.Consideringherenthusiasm,weallagreed.what引导的主语从句和which引导的非限制性定语从句Butwhatimpressedmemostwasthattent,whichwasforgottendeliberatelybyMom.高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。2.（2017年6月，浙江高考）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(骑行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that'sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofhearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac'srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac'sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追赶）。Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoshowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeekyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；,优点英语3.续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。【答案】Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.PaulandBeckygotoutofthecarimmediatelytogivethehelp.Withnothingonthehand,theydidn'tdaretofightagainstthewolf.However,theystillapproachedtothewolfbravely.Atthesametime,thewolfalsonoticedthemandturneditsheadback,howlingangrilytowardsPaulandBecky.Macthenjumpedoffthebicycleandwasreadytofightagainstthewolf.Thencamethedeadlock.Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Theyfoundthedangeroussituation,wherethreemencircledthewolf.Mac'sfriendsalsojumpedofftheirbicyclesandjoinedthefightwiththewolf.Moreandmorecarsstopped.Somedriverstookoutthesticksfromthecars,andsometookouttheknives,eventhegunstowardsthewolf.Inthemeanwhile,thewolfmightfeelthepeople'sthreatsaround,soitbegantostepbackslowly.Soon,itranawayofftheroadanddisappearedinthedistance.【解析】本文主要讲述了Mac在骑自行车前往阿拉斯加的途中，被一只狼追赶的故事。时态要考虑以一般过去时为主，人称以第三人称为主。同时要兼顾字数的要求，不要过多，关键词列出5个以上，需要均匀分布在两段中。考生要注意几个关键信息和情节变化并结合给出的内容提示进行合理构思。
